This is such a compelling read. I like the fact that you jump straight into the action without a lot of messy exposition. Also, I learned a new word (melismatic). And I really like the pacing of the action versus the inner narrative with Sera. Plus the sword fight just feels very realistic. I feel like this is a very unique kind of storytelling (fast-paced action, vivid prose, multiple narrative structures, dark humor, a little bit of body horror) that you wouldn't normally see in a fantasy story (if that is roughly the right genre) and I am so here for it.
Anyway sorry for the paragraph but I just really enjoyed this and now I have to read the rest of it.
Thank you thank you thank you (hope it's OK…I shared a longer response out on my notes page b/c I'm so thrilled you wrote what you did). You made my day.
> Anyway sorry for the paragraph but I just really enjoyed this and now I have to read the rest of it.
oh GOD NO please go on 😆 😆 😢
I have been at a crossroads recently and I'm working if my fantasy book¹ is connecting with anyone. I can't tell you how much I needed this win this morning. Thank you so much.
Notes:
1. you can call it whatever you want! fantasy, shlock or sword-core. Any genre applies. I love the "body horror" idea too, but not something I set out to do. What were you referencing?
This is such a compelling read. I like the fact that you jump straight into the action without a lot of messy exposition. Also, I learned a new word (melismatic). And I really like the pacing of the action versus the inner narrative with Sera. Plus the sword fight just feels very realistic. I feel like this is a very unique kind of storytelling (fast-paced action, vivid prose, multiple narrative structures, dark humor, a little bit of body horror) that you wouldn't normally see in a fantasy story (if that is roughly the right genre) and I am so here for it.
Anyway sorry for the paragraph but I just really enjoyed this and now I have to read the rest of it.
Thank you thank you thank you (hope it's OK…I shared a longer response out on my notes page b/c I'm so thrilled you wrote what you did). You made my day.
> Anyway sorry for the paragraph but I just really enjoyed this and now I have to read the rest of it.
oh GOD NO please go on 😆 😆 😢
I have been at a crossroads recently and I'm working if my fantasy book¹ is connecting with anyone. I can't tell you how much I needed this win this morning. Thank you so much.
Notes:
1. you can call it whatever you want! fantasy, shlock or sword-core. Any genre applies. I love the "body horror" idea too, but not something I set out to do. What were you referencing?
★★ THANK YOU Kit!! ❤️🫶
This is very, very good.
Nice work. I found it compelling from the onset.
I can't thank you enough for reading and commenting.